You Only Want Me

[♫mëkÅ-chan♫]

I can smell the lust around you
I can see the want in your eyes
I can feel the heat
I can taste the uncertain desire
I can read your mind
You want something
And you want it bad
You only want me
To pull you on top
To whisper in your ear
Saying please don't stop
You only want me
To bleed as you take
The only thing I have to hold
You only want me
To cry out your name
As I tremble below you
My body gone to shame
You only want me
To be used up and done
So no one can undo
All that you have done
You know what I see now?
The laughter in your eyes
The satisfaction of taking the prize
While I sit here
Wishing that I would die

[Gero50]

That is a very beautiful lpoem you made. I really like that you were able to keep the works similar without riming on every line. Keep up the hard work.

[*Tsuki*]

O.O wow. umm . . . that`s interesting. kinda scary when you think about it. Imagery was very realistic, but the flow might need some work? (not that I`m one to talk)

[♫mëkÅ-chan♫]

xD my flow is a bit iffy, it's because i put all that emotion inside and write it out on the paper in front of me. i dont really think about the format and how to make it professional just yet...but the emotion is definitely what makes it ....um iT lol

thank you for the constructive criticism it really helps me out in the future
when i write more when i just want to create something, that up there was just a pang of emotion from me <__<

i believe im talking too much...i will hush now xD