Just some stuff.

[Standartenführer]

Poem about ice cream:

Ice cream
What a dream
a thousand flavor
for me to savor
What a joyus treat
Such a feat
to eat all 5 scoops
Ties my tongue in loops
oh so cold
makes the brain fold
and gringe and freeze
makes ya sigh "jeez,
Not this horrid brainfreeze"

Poem about spring:

songs of birds ring the air,
down the way comes winter's heir,
the birds pass the colored flowers by,
raindrops wet the grey sky,
leaves on long-dead trees stretch out,
small mammals scurry about,
this is springtime,
let it chime.

Poem I wrote while slightly lovesick XD

Your happiness is the world to me,
Can't you see,
That you are my world
Before you I fold
Down to a knee
your smile is the world to me.

It's all I can do
The sole thing I can do for you
Is put a smile on those lips
That could launch a thousand ships
I am useless too you
Because that is all I can do

[Señor Nobody]

This is in the wrong forum, there's a poetry forum where you can put up your work.

[Standartenführer]

Hmm, this is the poetry forum isn't it?
OOps look like I made an uh-oh D=
Well, I don't know if I have the ability to move or delete this. =\
Sorry this was entirely my mistake

[Señor Nobody]

Sorry, my eyes are tricking me again, for a sec I thought you posted in the misc. forum. My Bad.

It's about 1:42 a.m. where I am right now. ^^

[Standartenführer]

Oh, you gave me a fright, I thought I was going blind

[Anime Forum]

Lmao I read your first post and I'm like what? This is clearly the poetry section =) lmao but mistakes happen. Anyways after reading it I really can't say much about it, Its decent I guess[that goes for all of them] Keep trying =) and good luck.

[Standartenführer]

Lmao I read your first post and I'm like what? This is clearly the poetry section =) lmao but mistakes happen. Anyways after reading it I really can't say much about it, Its decent I guess[that goes for all of them] Keep trying =) and good luck.

Any comments on how I can improve =3
That goes for the rest of you scalawags too ;D

[CrystalAce]

I found your poem of ice-cream really amusing . Do you really love ice-cream that much ?

Anyway, rest of your poems are decent as well. It seems you're pretty hardcore when it comes to rhyming words. As for my advice, well, try to put some decent title for the poem and some symbolism in the poem as well in the future.

See ya !