I wrote this one not to long ago so help me out...give me some critiques


The simplicity of your nature
infuriates my wellbeing
I hate how you treat me inferior
even though you had me meet my demise
I will reprimand you
and make this choice known
The blade of death
will consume your Black unforgiving soul
You beat me and punish my bones,
But i will slaughter you being
in the quest of the unforgiving.
The Black tears that drain form my eyes
are getting thicker
over and over
i see
the Blade of Death
speeding towards you.
Death is coming, and i will make it known