; Personally, I detest working with more than one focal point. If there's more than one person in the render/stock I'm trying to use, it's most likely going to get scrapped in the end despite my best efforts. So one hand, I'm thinking no
when it comes to this one. Too many places for my eyes to settle on, you know? Although I do appreciate how you made the girl on the right side sharper than the one of the left. It gives some balance. Another thing I think would've made it slightly better is if you moved the text into a different position. Maybe somewhere like this
. (Please excuse the way I raped your font and text colors and just in general. x_X) I don't know. Just something more to bring your eyes more towards the center, where they can register both sides at once without feeling scattered.