Lonely

[sailormoon21]

walking down the street i feel that i'm missing something, but what could it be?
as i continue to walk tears start to fall from my face, why am i crying thinking to myself.
i stop for a second and realize that i'm crying because i'm lonely without my fiancee'.

[Necro'lic Enigma]

Hmm...i dont know why but i dont feel like judging your poems because i feel i should not. Dont get me wrong , they are nice and pretty though they are short but with deep meanings , but its more like your writing for someone so i dont want to judge it. They are with pain , written all over it.

I wil pray for you though i dont know anything about you but i feel your in some kind of pain , i'll pray for your happiness.
I wish i am wrong but thats all i can say sister.

[Magical Soul]

Hmm...i dont know why but i dont feel like judging your poems because i feel i should not. Dont get me wrong , they are nice and pretty though they are short but with deep meanings , but its more like your writing for someone so i dont want to judge it. They are with pain , written all over it.

I wil pray for you though i dont know anything about you but i feel your in some kind of pain , i'll pray for your happiness.
I wish i am wrong but thats all i can say sister.

I agree it has a deeper meaning that can't be judged.

[Anime Forum]

walking down the street i feel that i'm missing something, but what could it be?
as i continue to walk tears start to fall from my face, why am i crying thinking to myself.
i stop for a second and realize that i'm crying because i'm lonely without my fiancee'.

I really don't like it and I am sorry If I'm being blunt but I am sure you would want the truth. Each line is too long and this poem could of been better with more thought.

Rating - 4/10

[mitsuki tensei]

this poem seems emotional, and like silent madness said it has deep meanings, its irie i like it.

[*Tsuki*]

It was only the last line I truely saw. While I read it, as soon as I finished a line, it escaped my memory and floated away into the sea of words forgotten. I can honestly say I forgot what you said in the poem, and it didn't really stick out to me. I just . . . Don't think it's as good as you could do.

[Teddie]

I agree. The last sentence was the most to pop out. But I think you should read this outloud to see the errors. But it's good.

[Lord of Death]

Well you should be happy now that you got exactly who and what you wanted the entire time... Bye forever! I will never caused you pain again, I'll leave it to other guys, But know that i did love you and cared about you, as for now and that I know exactly who you really are underneath I feel sorry for you, but its your life so live it well... So long friend!!!!

[Lord of Death]

walking down the street i feel that i'm missing something, but what could it be?
as i continue to walk tears start to fall from my face, why am i crying thinking to myself.
i stop for a second and realize that i'm crying because i'm lonely without my fiancee'.

I feel lonely without you too.. I can't stand to be away from you for more then an hour, it hurts me when your not around and I can't stand the pain. My love and feelings for you are so real and deeply and truly real, and that will and won't ever change!!! Love you sweetie!

[em0k1d k0]

sweet picture ladies and gentlemen lol write me? bye from:em0k1d k0

[kajikun16]

short poem nicely done and very direct to the point