Girl in the Mirror

[rEikAbLeU]

hope you guys will like this, i used to feel this way, but now im feeling better...

I see a girl in the mirror crying,
the tears in her cheeks, slowly falling,
reminiscing what happened in the past,
things she thought would last…


I wish i know how to stop her,
and tell her to get herself away from anger,
to tell her the past she should now forget,
even the very day that they met…


If the mirror could just speak,
it’ll tell her not to be so weak,
it’ll tell her to just move on,
to realize that she is worth something more…


The girl in the mirror looked back at me,
and i found out that it’s me i see,
yes, the girl in the mirror is me,
hoping someday to be full of glee…

[sasuke_boy]

my advice is not to make it so sad because if its happy they want more if its sad they would probaly cry and if they cry they would no next time u do 1 they would cry

i used three crys in there lol

[Rein*]

Its good and im glad your over it.
smile

[rEikAbLeU]

Its good and im glad your over it.
smile

im sure glad i am...
^_^

[seraphic_demon]

it's good, nice wording, good structure, i won't tell you to keep it up because you've got a lot of potential. keep writing! ^^

[SigmaSD]

Amazing. I especially like the last paragraph. It had the best structure and wording I've ever seen (and I've seen a lot). Have you entered in a contest lately, because your work is sure to win first prize.

[rEikAbLeU]

Amazing. I especially like the last paragraph. It had the best structure and wording I've ever seen (and I've seen a lot). Have you entered in a contest lately, because your work is sure to win first prize.

thank you for the appreciation, i haven't join any contest i dont have the guts to do so...

[rEikAbLeU]

MODS kindly just delete this post please...

i made a doube post, and i dont know how to delete it...

sorry...

[theDC]

That was sad. But a inner experience. Mirror represents the self, meaning you were looking for answer in yourself. Did you find it?

You should try a contest, you never know if you're good, if you don't try.

[rEikAbLeU]

That was sad. But a inner experience. Mirror represents the self, meaning you were looking for answer in yourself. Did you find it?

You should try a contest, you never know if you're good, if you don't try.

well thanks for the comment, yeah, i guess i found what im looking for...

contest? i dunno, i might try... in due time...

[theDC]

I'll look forward to it.

[Shia_san]

That was deep........I liked it. You're really good :]

[Megamind's Minion]

you're good...
& a lot of people could empathize with you...
lol....(like me... been there.. done that... & now that it's over, i'm happy that once upon a time... he became a part of my life...)
since the poem is simply written & it connotes what you are feeling...

(try joining contests... it's really inspiring when other people appreciates what you wrote)

[rEikAbLeU]

you're good...
& a lot of people could empathize with you...
lol....(like me... been there.. done that... & now that it's over, i'm happy that once upon a time... he became a part of my life...)
since the poem is simply written & it connotes what you are feeling...

(try joining contests... it's really inspiring when other people appreciates what you wrote)

aw! thanks for appreciating my work, you're not the first person who told me to join a contest... but im a coward... i don't wanna see my works not winning, so i'd rather not join at al... ^_^

[Megamind's Minion]

don't you wanna know or see what the critics would say?
you see, it's not a matter of winning a price...
being able to face your fear of rejection is winning in itself..
(believe me.. been there!)
& it could really help you improve your work...

[rEikAbLeU]

don't you wanna know or see what the critics would say?
you see, it's not a matter of winning a price...
being able to face your fear of rejection is winning in itself..
(believe me.. been there!)
& it could really help you improve your work...

without eve joining a contest i already got LOTS of critics, belive me there are lots of them... so, im not really scared of looing what im scared of is other people not able to appreciate my work and how i feel...

[Megamind's Minion]

appreciation is relevant...
but still, it depends on you...
i'll be looking forward to the day that you will finally join a contest..

[*Tsuki*]

(nods head) very nice.
very very very nice.
I wish I was as talented as you.
I loved it. . . and there's not much to say, but it's just amazing.

[rEikAbLeU]

(nods head) very nice.
very very very nice.
I wish I was as talented as you.
I loved it. . . and there's not much to say, but it's just amazing.

yopu can do things like this too...

you just have to use your lonelniess (well, that's what i do), and out it into writing...

[theDC]

yes, to write is to express the feelings.

[Foph]

Its good and im glad your over it.
smile

Me too. It's a nice poem.

[rEikAbLeU]

Me too. It's a nice poem.

thank you...

^_^

[Senjou_Akira]

Well it's good that you're over it. It shows that you have so much pain. At least writing would help to get over such sadness.

Sapakin moh sila pag ginaganyan ka nila. xD Kahit papano nalabas mo din glit mo. Sa kanila nga lang. lol

[rEikAbLeU]

Well it's good that you're over it. It shows that you have so much pain. At least writing would help to get over such sadness.

Sapakin moh sila pag ginaganyan ka nila. xD Kahit papano nalabas mo din glit mo. Sa kanila nga lang. lol

sige try kong saktan, kaya lang di ako balyolente eh...
nice to know one Filipino once more...