Please say what u think?

[BeuWolve]

Okay this is my 1st poem!
Wish Shakespeare could see this.lol

In the sands of time
I hope this bloody poem rythm
My eyes looking in yours
Ur body agianst mine

Together warming up the sky
My heart for u could never lie
For U I break metal bars
Kissing underneath the stars

With hugs & kisses
Your in my arms
I cant stay away from your charm
Cupid just never misses

So for luv and war
We fly and swore
U be forever mine
From my heart in the sands of time

[Future_Defense]

hmmm. I enjoyed reading the poem, but the bad spelling can be annoying. Also, try to make it longer! It feels like you cut it short, which is something you never want to do.

Keep it up!

[BeuWolve]

Thanx I'll keep that in mind
Sory about the spelling English wasn't my best subject