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    Just a little FYI: My poetry is usually following a rhyme pattern, but during last year summer, I went through an experimental phase. It may not make sense, but its about these sad goodbyes and revelations I went through. This was one I wrote during the summer...hopefully you guys will like it.

    [btw, crie is meant to be spelt that way]
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    iodine.
    malignant flakes.
    Of tear-stained
    Lies.

    iodine.
    tainted memoirs;
    Bleek, mournful
    Goodbyes.

    iodine.
    cracked crystal
    & bittersweet
    Crie.

    iodine.
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    I like how you separated each line into a phrase of only one or two words, it really helps on the overall impact of the poem and it's message. I don't really see any points where it can be improved so you did a good job in the arrangement of this.
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