Farewell...

[DemonicRay]

Farewell i shall leave with a promise

The sun is rising like always,
but to me it's different.
The winds might feel the same,
but the breeze is not ordinary to me.
For I will remember this day forever...

Everything is different to me today.
I have done all the need to do's,
but it feels like I have'nt done something yet.
I think it's too hard for me to do.
It shall be a burden for me to carry.

Then again, I look to the horizon.
I give out a faint trace of smile.
This I shall remember.
The last sight of the horizon with you.
I wipe down my tears.
I don't want you to see me cry.

I wanted to hug you.
No, it's more than that.
I also want to kiss you,
but i fear I must depart with this secret.
The only thing I have about you.
The only thing for me to keep.

I hope you will wait for me...
I am hoping for a welcome back hug.
For I will be back someday.

(hmm.. another of me old poems.. ^^ i dont even know how to rhyme yet... i just started rhyming too...like... only 5 rhyming poems so far.. i think... ^^)

[Sonata]

Poems don't always have to rhyme to be moving. I think you captured the emotion very well. It's almost haunting. Are the lowercase I's intentional?

[DemonicRay]

umm no.. @.@ the i's are typo..sheesh...i'll edit them right away... ty for noticing..


really? thx

[Kalt96]

It's really nice and I agree with Sonata. It's about the messege and the feelings to me, the rhyming only adds a little bit of style to it but it's not a a decisive factor at all.