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    Default Hope...?

    Hope...?

    Why does Sadness,
    Echo in my being?
    Why does loneliness,
    Ripple within me without noticing?

    Thrusted with this ominous feeling,
    Why did it happen so?
    Since when did such a thing,
    Cause me pain and suffering that's all so slow?

    Vines of thorns slowly wrap me,
    Bringing forth the want to break free real fast.
    But I'm bound with the shackles of memories,
    Preventing me to break free of my past.

    No hope... It's useless to dream,
    To dream for a better tomorrow.
    Why did my happiness leave me?
    Leaving me with nothing but pain and sorrow.

    With the things I've realized,
    I believe that there's no such thing as justice and truth.
    I wear a mask of happiness to hide what's within,
    For the seeds of hope that an angel sown inside me has bore a bad fruit.

    Why won't tears flow,
    At the moment they need to.
    It's all welled inside,
    I wonder why...? Couldn't get a clue.

    Tortured soul impaled in sadness,
    Now I have become.
    My heart invaded with pain and suffering,
    I guess my hope will never come.
    Last edited by BlazingSoul; 07-30-2007 at 08:44 AM.
    "As the blood starts to boil, the flow of crimson splendor will act like a flood" ~R

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    one spelling mistake. 'preventing'. a nice one.




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    Sorry about that. I corrected it already.
    "As the blood starts to boil, the flow of crimson splendor will act like a flood" ~R

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    i absolutely am crazy about this one..i hope to see some more

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    Good poem, keep it up.
    Thine soul is mine for the keeping
    As a thousand rivers now dividing
    Provides me with that much needed killing!

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    How sad... How truely sad...
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    I know what you mean mate. Only you describe it so much better then me. =p Very good I like it and I know it's feeling also. =( Anyways Good Poem

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    I can see you have the making of a good poet. Here's the problem: The style in which you write is simplistic. It's not your fault, but there are too many people that always write in the 4 line stanza form.

    Also, a small vocabulary can make some rhymes that you make seem a bit.....corny. Otherwise, not bad.
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    Nice. I actually like the simplicity.

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    I think its a pretty good poem.....

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