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    This is a poem I wrote a little while after my uncle died. He drank himself to his grave and my family often says he died with a whiskey bottle in his hand. If what I have in this poem is against the rules, I wont complain if you delete it.

    The Devils playing a game
    With your life and mine
    With three dice and a knife
    He’s playing his game
    I die or you.
    It’s left to the dice
    Thrown onto ice
    Slipping and sliding around on the glass table

    Three different kinds of people
    Goths, prepps and those insane
    With everything in between
    Those who are insane
    Know the most about this game
    They don’t kick, they don’t scream, just go along silently
    Then they’re gone completely

    The dice are tossed
    A red number is obtained
    Yours?
    Mine?
    We both got lucky
    Don’t thirst for revenge
    Cause vengeance makes you thrive
    In this game…you die or I

    Five…Four…One
    So close yet still closer
    Only…only three red numbers
    And you will die
    Throw the dice again and see, I don’t lie
    Scream when you cry
    Scream when you die

    18 is the magic number
    666 is the game
    Get unlucky and they drop the blade
    The devils laughing at you
    Unable to throw your own death
    Make it quick cause he doesn’t wait
    Death waits on no one
    Keep on screaming…it only fills the void

    It’s time to die
    You or I
    He doesn’t lie
    He drops the blade and then
    Plop, your heads lopped off
    That cross won’t save you when your red numbers drawn
    But it’s too late, you’re already dead

    The dice are your life
    Take your chances and see
    What’s meant to be
    Don’t kick, don’t scream
    Just roll the damn dice to see
    How long it’s going to be
    Before a loud clang makes you drop the bottle you’ve held so long
    But the whiskey will be forever present on your sleeping lips

    Sleep forever my uncle
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    Not even I have the heart to criticize a poem that is written for such a reason.

    Don't get me wrong, this is a great poem, written for a good purpose as well. Great work.
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    Hey that was AWESOME!!! I really liked it! Not over distirbing, it was just right... After a death if sometimes you dont feel like sharing your emotions with anyone, I know its easiest to write something meaningfull down on paper. Even if it turns out S*** or a masterpiece! LOVE IT!!! I quoted my favorate part... It ties the poem up nice and pulls it back to its true meaning.

    Quote Originally Posted by Zan Voaga View Post

    Before a loud clang makes you drop the bottle you’ve held so long
    But the whiskey will be forever present on your sleeping lips

    Sleep forever my uncle
    I also wrote a poem about someone close dying, I just posted it "My Quiet Silence"... Not as long or meanigfull as yours, but cheak it out and post a reply if you like???
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    Intersting, nice...The feeling of complete desolation is remarkable. Keep writing and you'll get somewhere for sure.
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    Thank you, it's been almost three years since my uncle died. Though I was never close to him, I got angry when there was nothing I could to do help him. But somewhere depression took over. My grades dropped, my friends worried and I eventually wrote this several months later. Since writing this, I haven't cried over him being gone. I haven't hardly cried a tear for anything. I've also heard countless stories of women whove never gotten over being abused by a man. My father, is a classic example of this. I've written things on him, though not in poem form. He DID mentally abuse me and I have since come to hate him. This poem was first written about my father, before the ending was added. Then, I made it a tribute to my uncle to hopfully help someone else kick their habbit. I've also come to realise you can't help someone if they don't want it or wont let you. My uncle and father have tought me this, and that I wont let addiction take my life from me.

    Again, thank you all for reading my tribute to my uncle, Tony L.

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