only a daydream

[danie-chan]

*i am inspired to write more peoms...*
*tell me if they suck or not... okay??*

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the world seemed to stand still
as your eyes stare back into mine

a kiss was the only thing missing

"a daydream"

i woke up and felt flustered

"only a daydream"

my time with you has stopped

"just a daydream"

i want to exchange reality and my daydream

i want to see you again

"in my daydream"

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"I LOVE BellZ!!!!"

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“This fairytale is supposed to end with you dying and me crying…

…but the fairytale ended the other way around…

…with me dying and you crying.”

[bttr]

Another nice poem from Danie-chan and I love day dreams(until someone wakes you up).

[danie-chan]

thanks!!!! and i feel the same way about daydreams!!! especially if it's about someone you really like!!!!

the bad thing about daydreaming is getting caught by someone, the worst of them is a teacher!!!*guilty*

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"I LOVE BellZ!!!!"

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“This fairytale is supposed to end with you dying and me crying…

…but the fairytale ended the other way around…

…with me dying and you crying.”

[Serae]

I like it. I can tell you're getting a lot better. I can't wait to see more from you. ^^

[LavenderMist]

I dont like your poem.

(I have nothing against you. Im just being honest)

I wish you good luck in making a better poem.

[shikamaruluv13]

i like that poem it was really beuatiful i love daydreams to i have them all the time especially in skool which is a bad thing for me and my grades

[~Mithrosent~]

Well, it was pretty good. It wasn't about depression and anger. For once. ^.^ But i did like it. It had a rythmn and feel to it. Kind of like a dreamy feeling which went well with this poem. Great job. You are getting better.
~Genivive~

[danie-chan]

I dont like your poem.

(I have nothing against you. Im just being honest)

I wish you good luck in making a better poem.

well... i knew that someone won't like it... anyway, thank you for being honest with what you think!!! i'll try to make a poem that you would like..

thanks for all the people who think that is was great!!!!

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"I LOVE BellZ!!!!"

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“This fairytale is supposed to end with you dying and me crying…

…but the fairytale ended the other way around…

…with me dying and you crying.”

[Kitanoru]

I like your poem a lot danie-chan, and I am sure they will get better and better each time you make another one. I too love to writing poetry, and I have a few that I have made in my spare time too. Poetry is a great way to display your feelings, and you seem really happy in this one. That is awesome! To tell you the truth, I like daydreaming too sometimes. However, if work needs being done, I will attend to that first.

Ha ha, well anyways keep up the great work danie-chan, you are doing great!

~Viper Soul