My Despair

[lilly belle]

I sit in the dark cell of despair
Waiting for a savior, who isn't there
It seems no one here gives a care
I wait, and can feel my heart begin to tear
The burden I carry, I cannot bear
I dream of my love, handsome and fair
Seeing his silky, golden hair
I breathe the stank in the air
As I look out the window, I can only stare
The gallow man already is there
A man with silky, golden hair
A guard drags me into the cold October air
I'm so cold, my arms and feet bare
The rope around my neck, I stare
My love with the silky, golden hair
Turns out to be
My despair

[cat lord3]

beautiful, i love it

[Kite The .Hacker]

im whimpering. so nice. thats the kind of poem i like.

[Tetsanosuke]

Hmmm... I see another low and cold poem here, well I'll rate it how it is then.

I like how it kept to one rhyme, but it got somewhat redundant around the middle especially when you had to reuse words.

But the flow wasn't bad and the spelling didn't have too many errors.

So I'll give it a thumbs up.

(^Now that's how to post a comment! Lol)

[Korobi]

Wow, that poem really got me in the end. Very nicely done! I really like poems or stories like that.

[~Mithrosent~]

I thought it was alright. It repeats a bit to much for my intrest. To some people its good. All in all it was good. i liked how it had a story to it and not just lines that ryhme. ^.^ Did it take you long to make it? (Curious)Kudos!
~Genivive~

[shikamaruluv13]

that poem is so beautiful i like it a lot

[Sakura Holic]

It's beautiful. I enjoyed it alot.

[Serae]

I like it also, but I have to say, it did bore me a little. I don't really like how all the ending words.... well rhyme all the same. It feels like the rhymes just stay the same....o.O; <Coughs.> I hope you know what I mean, or what I'm trying to say. Anyways.... It was still a lovely poem. ^.^

[lilly belle]

It really didn't take too long to write. Thanks for ur interest and comment