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    Default All I Believe

    All I believe
    Is wasted when spoken
    Like summer-fed dreams
    Which glimmer like tokens
    In my pockets which cry
    For more trinkets though broken
    Spewing their contents
    Into a river thatís choakin

    All I believe
    Is sweet when Iím lying
    On an ocean of seas
    Which dance while Iím crying
    And I hold my tongue
    Like a sword that is dying
    And bearing a shield
    With only one wing for flying
    I canít escape the grass
    Which holds me with prying
    Words like the nimbus
    Of friends who are sighing
    Dreams on their plates
    Which they eat while not trying
    To drown their fears
    In fires that are blinding

    All I believe
    I steel forged in slumber
    And all that I taste
    Is sickly and tender
    So easy to float
    On flotsam of lumber
    When everyone bloats
    Like a swollen distender

    All I believe
    Is of knives which are singing
    Like sirens from Greece
    With ovaries ringing
    From deep in their hearts
    All apathetic and stringing
    My hopes up from the rafter
    And stones they are flinging
    To skip cross a lake
    But the all and up sinking
    Into my soul
    Where I believe they are bringing
    Something up from the depths
    A dream I had buried while screaming

    All I believe
    I want to perceive
    But it floats in my eye
    From where I canít retrieve
    Deep in a cavern
    Of some womanís body
    Where I donít want it to be

    All I believe
    Is a fume I could breath in
    Like chlorine or fire
    As all of these needs swim
    In the arms I could cast
    Groping for turgid stomachs to dwell in
    Where people are drowning
    In fluids where the sin

    All I believe
    Is of fire and brimstone
    Of a man with a rock
    And two knives made of man-bone
    And sniffing airless splendor
    Of my now long dead home
    Which drifts in a whirlpool
    And screams for a future
    With two people to dance
    In strength and in pain
    And all that I want
    Is the flower of flowers
    Its scent just like power
    It drifts in the dowery
    Of a mistress I had
    Back when I was five or so
    An old man at age four
    Till I fell into this hole
    The tragedy of life comes not from pain, despair, sorrow, or even death; but the constant annihilating amnesia that begs us to forget we live.


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    Swordwind,
    You have nice imagery in this, and it has a nice rhythme to it,
    except for " In fluids where the sin" It really sticks out, and breaks up the flow, imo.
    Peace be with you.
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