desire

[Howling Star]

My desire.
I want someting.
Right now mine feelings are fused in one thin wire.
Wat I want is not a golden ring.
Desire

I want it so bad.
I would even kil for it.
But thats to sad.
Its like selling youre sould to the devil that dosent fit.

I wil get it I just have to wait.
I have to hang on for a wile.
Thats wat I sayd.
But when I looked back there were dead bodys evrywere a whole pile.

Wat did I do ?
Did I lost my mind ?
Im no more a human mine eyes are no longer blue.
Now im blind.

All I can see is one big flame.
I became a undead.
Its al mine fault I cant give anyone the blame.
I wanna cry this is so sad.

But undead dont feel a thing.
The wire is gone its cut down.
I scream like I sing.
Mine eyes growd brown

My hearth is tearing apart.
The sin im walking with.
Stil im not feeling a thing in mine hearth.
I cant sit.

I cant die.
I cant do wat i desire.
I wanna be gone and fly.
All is gone gone is my wire.

[Furubalova]

gosh you write stuff i would write lol >< besides the spelling errors i liked it

[Howling Star]

Sory for that im bad in english i try to edit them. First i need to know or they worth it. =p

[Furubalova]

i'll edit them if you want me to (i have nothing else to do lol) all poetry is worth keeping! some i keep because they reflect who i am, others because i can see how i need to change my style. you can always learn from your poetry, even if it is crappy.

[Howling Star]

I think the words are nice done just the gramar is crappy Xd. The meaning is the guy is just screwed. =p

[Neko Kira]

I dont get it why cant you die? just take a sharp razor blade and.. okay ill stop. Very good poem though.

[Howling Star]

I dont get it why cant you die? just take a sharp razor blade and.. okay ill stop. Very good poem though.

Read again. In the middle somewere he sayd he lost his human form. Hes a undead now and as you know the undead dont die. Muahahaha hes just cursed.