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    Default A Walk In The Rain

    I walk in the rain,
    Hear it pounding on the street,
    In a deep thought,
    Wondering why....

    Why did we meet?
    Your kindness so sweet,
    Why did you come to me?
    With your thoughts I agree,
    Why did this occur?
    You made my life a blur....

    I feel the rain,
    Hair dripping,
    Heart hurting,
    I remember back....

    I first met you,
    You stuck like glue,
    Your kindness suprised me,
    You where on a happy spree,
    I thought you where strange,
    Soon my opinion would change.....

    I drag my feet,
    Walking in the puddles,
    Looking at the ground,
    In a transe like state,
    A part of my mind opens....

    To when I said i love you,
    You felt that way too,
    Telling me nice things,
    Already thinking of rings,
    I wasn't read for that,
    Just a casual chat,
    In love so deep,
    Your heart I wanted to keep....

    I kick a rock,
    Still staring down,
    I look up and drive my tears,
    The thought I have hurts....

    The first time we fought,
    Stings of love so taut,
    Couldn't handle the pressure,
    Needinga love thats fresher,
    Our differences where great,
    Causing problems at out dates,
    Anger filled me heart,
    Slowly, our love would depart....


    An eerie silence comes,
    The rain has stopped,
    Sun shining above,
    When I realize,
    It's you that I still love....
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    Wonderfull, yet again it flows. And it is sad.. i think poems are only meant to be sad, or romantic ^.^
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    They are ent to express how I feel....I don't know If I'm sad or what just kind of blah. I tried something different with this poem. One section is what I'm doing and doesn't ryhme. The next is what I'm thinking and does ryhme. Thanks for the comliment! *Reps*
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    I love it! It flows way better than my poems. Keep it up Ven-chan!
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    Thanks! I tried my best to make it flow..But, it isn't that great.
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    That was the best p[oem I think I've heard yet... wow.. your really good.. the way it flowed perfectly, as well as all the right things for a poem.. awesome..
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    A sad poem of regret. Regret is for people who
    have earned the right to look back on the past.
    A very deep and agreeable poem. Nicely done.
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    Quote Originally Posted by † Lilium †
    A sad poem of regret. Regret is for people who
    have earned the right to look back on the past.
    A very deep and agreeable poem. Nicely done.
    Does that mean I shouldn't regret? I still love the person it was for but you know that's okay 'cause we won't get back together. Past is the past can't change it right?
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    Whoa.Nice,I love the way it is in questions mostly.Your poem is depressing ,but it has a nice vibe to it.I like it.You are a talented poem writer.Keep up the good work.



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    this is a depressing poem but its very deep and it has a good flow! and good choice of words, Nicely done.

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    Your very talented Vendetta, I really liked your poem, it's one of the best I have read in here. There are some little errors, but good choice of words and nice flow you got there too. Like Lilium said it's very deep, I like that. Keep writing, I would like to see more.

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    I understand what you wanted to say, but you may want to check your spelling and grammar. Other than those mistakes I say it's a good piece of work. It flows well and makes good use of the vast english language. Keep it up! ; ) (I'd use the smily, but it's a bit over the top.)
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