Vancant lots,
Hollow alleyways.
Something doesn't seem right,
Might be the smell of decay.
Sun's starting to shine,
People awake to the day.
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Vancant lots,
Hollow alleyways.
Something doesn't seem right,
Might be the smell of decay.
Sun's starting to shine,
People awake to the day.
Hmm that was hot. Simple but good. Atleast you didn't make 3458976 spelling errors. ;D
I try not to spell things incorrectly.
Thank you.
I don't really understand what the message is.:\
Not all poems are supposed to have a message.
In some cases some have multiple message, as is the case with this poem.
What do you think one of them could be?
its good, i dont see many people write poems on here.
Death is near.
O_o that's all I'm able to find on this site lol
It was good but it was very short.
-TWM-
I've seen shorter.
Short and shweet =D (no errors... so it didnt' make very much of a difference this time =D) Pretty good ^^;
Last edited by Nerveya; 07-08-2005 at 01:12 PM.
What were my errors? I'd like to know.
great poem Ai keep it up
Sometimes The Minute You Give Up On Everything Somebody Shows Up And Cheers You Up Right Before Your Very Eyes It Happened To Me And He Knows Who He Is I Hope.
Thank you, your encouragement is always welcomed! <3
Sounds good; short and sweet. Plus, as Naokomi mentioned before, you didn't make *insert seven digit number here* typos.
Keep the great work up!
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