Such A Pretty Girl

[Miss Chola]

Such a pretty girl
Why do you do this?
You harm yourself
You cut your wrists

Such a pretty girl
I don't get it
Such a pretty girl
Why do you do it?

Such a pretty girl
With the scars on her arms
Such a pretty girl
Shining like a star

[Anime Forum]

This poem makes me feel kinda down for reasons I will not share but your poem's flow was a bit off. Out of all three stanzas, your third one was my favorite and even though I know you can do better and maybe add on to it a bit, its pretty decent.

[Miss Chola]

This poem makes me feel kinda down for reasons I will not share but your poem's flow was a bit off. Out of all three stanzas, your third one was my favorite and even though I know you can do better and maybe add on to it a bit, its pretty decent.

you're right, i can do better, but this was my most recent one. But thankies for the input =D

[Anime Forum]

you're right, i can do better, but this was my most recent one. But thankies for the input =D

Oh its no problem =] writing my ideas about poetry in this section is one of my favorite things to do on this site so yea, your welcome.

[OtakuInu!!!]

It's average. It's kinda emo. But well expressed. It's a short poem. I really like the message. I also don't think the font colors go under the poetry forum rules. Anyway, it's kinda sad that the girl has lots of wound on her arms.

[wowzabunny]

ok poem

[Miss Chola]

It's average. It's kinda emo. But well expressed. It's a short poem. I really like the message. I also don't think the font colors go under the poetry forum rules. Anyway, it's kinda sad that the girl has lots of wound on her arms.

well the girl i wrote it about is a cutter, and this particular poem means a lot to me because i really like this girl. =D but thankies for the input!!

[*Tsuki*]

yea, I agree with -Raiken-.
I think it gets better as it goes on,
and I think you can do better.

[Princess Cupcake]

The first stanza, which had initially caught my attention, was good. I didn't like the ending though because of the simple simile "shining like a star." Seemed sort of elementary, not trying to be mean or anything but it definitely has potential if you went back and edited a few things I think it would be way better.