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    Default In Search of Brighter Days

    Dysthymic rhythms sensed abound
    In tumult light I find blood shed,
    A casting of the carnal form
    A minute detail painted red

    A resolution of these vows

    Where abstractions seek company
    Like misery and depravity;
    Their own clandestine symphony

    I sought the secret until now

    But now I can't be sure it's sound
    I whisk away these thoughts
    In lieu of a firmer ground

    Where terra-firma lay surreal

    Between instinct and deception,
    I barter ways to sounder days
    Where I can be the exception

    The mirror is blank, it holds no form

    For now between it's cracks I'm torn
    As I retreat from guilty paves
    And tread the stars for brighter days

    Caught up so deep in desire

    Between my love and my ire,
    One to keep, forever to stay
    Hopefully the former as is made


    Perhaps the world was never meant to make perfect sense.


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    Default Re: In Search of Brighter Days

    You have quite the vocabulary! Such interesting words you have chosen for this poem! My favorite part is:
    The mirror is blank, it holds no form
    For now between it's cracks I'm torn
    I especially like the line "A casting of the carnal form." There's something about it that seems so raw. Nicely done!

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    Default Re: In Search of Brighter Days

    I like the first line. Really a strong opening to the poem. Overall, well done.


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    Default Re: In Search of Brighter Days

    That.. Was an amazing poem, I really like it.




    "When you turn and walk away you don't hear me say."

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