I would like to submit this poem in a contest and I was hoping to get some honest feedback on if I should change anything or add more to it. Tell me what you liked about it and what you didn't.
Lullaby
Flickering light in the distance
Dances under the star's assistance
Portrayed the night in simple terms
Left me lifeless and never learns
"Take a seat," said the crescent moon
"Close your eyes, but hear my tune"
A voice rather calming, it would seem
Then, slowly I drifted, into a dream
How unreal such visions had been
This must just be, my imagination
Without any windows, without any walls
Without inhibitions, nature calls
Kaleidoscopic world, so far away
Nice to visit, too bad I can't stay
Where lines connect and colors collide
We remind our mind to open wide
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