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    Default The will to stay.

    When in doubt, turn left?
    Can't I just be
    Direction-less?

    Bring it on, move forward
    What if the future
    Is too awkward?

    Should I listen and carry along
    Defining my moods
    Through story and song

    Or perhaps step up, challenge fate
    Prioritize 'doing it right'
    Over 'arriving late'

    So what if I'd rather rest and sing
    Relax outside, lean back
    And swing

    I know deep down, that if I'm needed
    I'll rise to the challenge
    Energy proceeded

    So why should we, join a crowd
    Polluting the air
    With dust and clouds

    When sitting, smiling, is worth more
    Save on the wood
    Who needs a door?

    Freedom becomes, what you choose
    Which means it's gone
    If you watch the news

    Find your values and live in peace
    Respect your neighbors
    Be they man, land or beast

    And remember, just cause you choose to be still
    It's not evidence
    Of a lack of will.
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    Default Re: The will to stay.

    Few of the parts flow really well together others are kind of off. over all, I enjoyed it.

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    Default Re: The will to stay.

    I wasn't really into it in the beginning because it didn't seem to flow as well but as soon as it got to the stanza:
    "So what if I'd rather rest and sing
    Relax outside, lean back
    And swing"
    I basically loved it. The rest of the poem just worked really well and I absolutely loved the message behind it.
    The last two stanzas really brought the whole thing together and it was really evident as to what that message was, giving the title a meaning.

    My favorite stanza definitely has to be:
    "Find your values and live in peace
    Respect your neighbors
    Be they man, land or beast"
    It flows really nicely with the rhyming going over really well but not appearing awkward and I absolutely adore what it says with the "Be they man, land or beast" because I find it to be so true.
    People really do need to respect their neighbors these days and realize that humans aren't the only thing on earth.

    Overall, you did a great job and I love it. ^^


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