In Thought

[Keena]

Ok, so this is something I wrote some time back and I just want a little feedback on it. I know I'm amateur but you can give some advice! Thanks!

I look back even though I think I shouldn't,
I smile a while, then I keep on running,
Towards what, I don't know.
I can't exactly see where I'm going,
But then this emotion just explodes from my heart,
And I don't know what's going to happen,
I just try to see through the fog.
I laugh though I don't really intend to,
Something pulls me to the end,
I stare blankly ahead and wonder what I'm going to find beyond,
Maybe this is just another dream!
I sigh and wake from lying in the rain,
Still, that emotion stirs in me,
I don't know if I will comprehend it, maybe I will,
But for now, I just want to lie in the rain and fade with the world.
I want to forget, nothing can anchor me now,
Eyes closed, I wander again,
Into the darkness I go,
It's back down to earth for me,
But only for a while.
Will you join me?

[Princess Cupcake]

Doesn't seem that amateur. The actions are well detailed, which I love. Is it hell you are referring to in the end?

[Keena]

Actually, no! Hell had no significance for me in this poem. To be honest, I woke from a dream and wrote this description of it! o.0

[Suzume]

I love it. I love your poems.

[Senjou_Akira]

look, you may be new to this kind of thing but it doesn't mean you're not good at it. i like your free style works you know