Just a little FYI: My poetry is usually following a rhyme pattern, but during last year summer, I went through an experimental phase. It may not make sense, but its about these sad goodbyes and revelations I went through. This was one I wrote during the summer...hopefully you guys will like it.
[btw, crie is meant to be spelt that way]
I like how you separated each line into a phrase of only one or two words, it really helps on the overall impact of the poem and it's message. I don't really see any points where it can be improved so you did a good job in the arrangement of this.