Okay, another poem. This one is actually a gift for ~Zetromis~. But, I want to make it better, so any advice is welcome! ^^ thanks
thank you for everyone who has responded, it means a lot and I'm trying hard make this poem better.
I wrote this last night and thought to share it with you guys. Please give your honest opinion no matter how harsh. It is only throught honest criticism that we can become better at whatever we do. So ... enjoy? :unsure:
The Journey of Love
Take a journey with me my love,
To a world where...
For security and refuge
For love and comfort
For joy and laughter
For passion and pain
I'll stay wrapped in your embrace
to pull you closer.
Yea, so I was really bored today so i decided to write a poem. Hope you like it! so yea, tell me what ya think. ^_^
I’m Wishing For
I’m wishing for a time, when everything will turn out right,
I'm wishing for a time, when I don't have to fight.
I’m wishing for a time, when you can say you...
Here is another one by me. Please, Please tell me what you think:(
Is It Me?
Is it me or is it you?
Is it the way i act or the things i do?
How did we end up here,
After all the things we had planned.
We took off on the wings of the wind,
I was working on a poem all this week, 'cause I want to enter it in a school contest. I don't think it flows real well, but I couldn't think of anything to do to fix it, so this is what I have so far. So, what do you guys think I should do to fix it?
So many stars, I wonder...
I wrote this today. IT is currently untitled but I hpe you like it. Please be free to be honest.
A silent gaze perpetuated by time and stage
A comforting note written on a neatly crushed page
These things remind me of your grace
These things instill in me a mere resemblance of your...
Im not gonna be, just a pawn in your game
You've taken my dreams and ripped them apart
Your trying to be different but really your the same
Give me nothing, i'll man up, and take my shot
Bring me chaos, I'll bring you pain
I had one chance, and i prayed to the flame
I focused on strength...
And so we're standing there
In the moment of our time
The world still turns
But i see you in a room full of people
The motion starts and stops
When i hear your name
Your face lights me up
Like when the night meets a flame
This one is not really deep. Its just me having fun with words and paper and rhyme. Tell me if you like it.
I pledge to write things true and light,
Not just to write to my hearts delight,
And i'll keep on writing these words enlightening,
My views my thoughts, the...
The air of the sea,
Granted by the maiden of the misty breeze
In hopes and in dreams of what life could bring,
The power of the ocean rising up to sing
The psalms of determination take flight
As the undersea flora and fauna hold tight
Like roots which all have grafted...
I was just dreaming through time
Just committing the crimes
Of idleness lines
I had the world in my shoe
And with all I could do
I did nothing but you
White little moons on the sill
Of the window at will
With a stone and the still
One of my favorites. This is something I wrote during summertime last year when I was just hangin' out with some friends out in a field by where I used to live on an awesome moonlit night.
Soft grass with
a cool breeze.
Watch the trees in the autumn cold
The breeze flowing from nocturnal skies
The reaching of a child's hand
Or maybe the puppy dog's eyes
Think of all the right and wrong
And connect it to your heart
Think about your favorites songs,
Or maybe how your life fell apart
Oh, there are shards on the ground
And goose boots they pound
With mortar like drumbeats
That wither through concrete
And reverberate into the night
And people twist as they burn
Like great whirlwinds that turn
Spinning outward then save
On breath then into the greave
Well here's my un-rhyming poem (I was told they didn't have to rhyme):
The world used to be a beautiful sphere
Full of wonderous, respectful lives
But overtime, people changed
Now the world is different
Full of pitiful, rapacious lives
And this poor world of ours
Has been blackened with...
I wrote this when my bf was away. I hope you all like it.
Keeping busy to dissolve the pain
Thinking of ideas to absolve the strain
Hoping you can come up with
Ways to remain sane
Long enough for me to greet you,
With a lasting embrace.
I wrote this for my bf whom I broke up with a little ago. I am really heart broken and sad so I wrote this for him.
I loved you, and I still do
I want to be with you, but as much as I do
I wrote this for this boy right after i met him. I mean i was instantly taken with him. Hope you like it.
Joy and laughter
Eyes of gold,
hands that flow steadily over me
Bold and daring
Strong and caring
Poetry is dead to me
eye so cold can barely see
insides so black I barley breath
what on earth has become of me
All my words are confused
all my ideas are being misused
Lain out on the floor
With no collaborator
my projects are in vain.
They'll go unfinished , unchanged.
With no co star my movie is a flop
Cinematography isn't even a good prop
Yep, my first poem I get to post on the poetry section of this forum. Btw this poem may not be long, but I put all my heart into it for the girl I admire and love. I wanted to make it short and sweet.
..Is it to late..?
To ask you on a date?
Lyrics for a song.
Free With Broken Chains
You thought you could bolt me to the wall
You thought you could control me
The truth is that I can easily break free
Now the chains and terms you put upon me
Are broken, broken, and I am free, free, free
The leaves fly past hitching a random ride
On the magical rollercoster in the air
It's autum and the worlds changing colour
We all watch the same sun, me here and you there.
The seas may crash and spill over to the land
Like an army of nature, invading the castle of life
I just a random guy...
It's in simple English. Lengthy! =w=; Ugh, enjoy.
It all started when I was fifteen,
I was the crookedest crook you've ever seen.
I hit down people on my way,
and my alignment stays where it lays.
Along this journey
my loyalty takes me
only so far
Our first confrontation
I lost to you
and your corporation
formed in Shinjuku
Spread your wings, little one
And fly, forever free.
Bear these dreams, precious love
Endure this life, and confide in me.
Let the storms pursue with tomorrow
And postulate the sun will come out.
Let this hope overpower the sorrow
With no qualms of doubt.
I am your hero, denied your praise
Flying through your confusion to the source
Fighting off all comers that get in your face
Call me the lonley passion of force
But you don't see me flying around high
Not wanting to fall.. but not wanting to fly
Theres a time i look at the birds by my side...
I wish you would be here to stay.
Stay here so you can never go away.
So please, hug me all through the night,
and hold me close really really tight.
Short and concise but it gets down to my point ^ ^;
Sound the trumpet now
He just wants to come home
J hath have travelled the seas
And now he only sees the clouds
The spirit of the wind kisses his cheek
His face feels the chill
Hand wrapped around his sword
Holds his arm held high.. even if weak
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