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Bittersweet
05-08-2008, 02:42 AM
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Dark Wolf 09
05-08-2008, 02:57 AM
Another good work! Hmm..I like the narration used in third person.. Climax was great! Good job I'll rate this one a A. The whole "love/death" relationship took it's toll. Lol. But overall great vocabulary. ^_^;

Hypergraphian
05-14-2008, 03:03 PM
Mmm... agreed. Pretty interesting structure you have in this one. Why haven't I seen you on AF Fanfiction? Oh no matter, I haven't been around much myself. Good expressive piece. Keep it up :)

+Namiko+
05-30-2008, 09:20 PM
The immagery is absolutely beautiful. You got me...I'm stunned. Art hasn't been lost.

Karsh
06-18-2008, 08:40 AM
Nice job. I like your story and I donīt have anything to complain about it. Go on.