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AngelofDreams
08-20-2006, 10:27 PM
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Amaruk
08-23-2006, 02:38 AM
This was a great chapter, I like a bit of mystery in a story. You are doing pretty good, with the female character, but I too am a guy so what do I know. Anyway, can't wait to read chapter three.

AngelofDreams
08-23-2006, 02:55 AM
Hurray! A reply!

Misha1688
09-13-2006, 08:49 AM
I really liked the chapter...it's all so mysterious and I like how you described the thoughts of Tari...you are very talented...Even if it was a little hard for me to read (just because my native language is not English) it caught my attention from the start. Keep it up..you are doing a great job! And yeah you are getting feminine stuff right, at least in my opinion. :D